Maybe this one will be better.
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Oh grand Phallus
You live
In a palace
Wearing your phony crown
But atoms and quarks
Defy your remarks
For in the end
We lose all sound
The sun will expand
Making coal of the land
And with it too
The myth you spew
Impressed not the least
With your strut
Impoverished player
Reality guts
In gaps you fill
With magical spells
Wane through generations
Morphing into newer fables
Beseeching is reason
You can't hold hostage
Free from your shackles
My mind grasps knowledge
Transparent friends
Fall prey to truth
Your god is not needed
And neither are you
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You're last one was fine, don't listen to the lone hater.
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Brian, it's ok. I do have my "moments" and that last poem was much like beer goggles and waking up in the morning with a feeling of coyote ugly in looking at who you slept with.
This one however, I am much more attune to defending.
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I have had a fixation in trying to work in Shakespeare's "life is but a poor player" line. So "Impoverished player" is an homage to that line and the recognition that this is all there is.
"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers."Obama
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and another contribution from me to the world of poetry as inspired by brian!!!!
Perchance it be that just like you
In the closet I'm a eunuch too
Love not lost but oh so few
The times I spent without a clue
And for this Brian I do weep
That his conscience and tenderness must run so deep
As the apologies and the anger and venom spew
So must the words of poets ring true.
my biggest poetic influences are charles bukowski, leonard cohen, and dylan thomas. if that tells you anything.
wait i don't know how the fuck that is relevant to anything.
i just got back from this year's wassail btw and i am fuckin blitzed on plum brandy and cheap slovak vodka. and i just sang wham's "last christmas" with a bunch of guys from the village.
god i love the holidays.
"I have never felt comfortable around people who talk about their feelings for Jesus, or any other deity for that matter, because they are usually none too bright. . . . Or maybe 'stupid' is a better way of saying it; but I have never seen much point in getting heavy with either stupid people or Jesus freaks, just as long as they don't bother me. In a world as weird and cruel as this one we have made for ourselves, I figure anybody who can find peace and personal happiness without ripping off somebody else deserves to be left alone. They will not inherit the earth, but then neither will I. . . . And I have learned to live, as it were, with the idea that I will never find peace and happiness, either. But as long as I know there's a pretty good chance I can get my hands on either one of them every once in a while, I do the best I can between high spots."
--Hunter S. Thompson
I like my style. BTW, here is one of my favorite poems from some stupid bitch who also IN THAT POEM used the same format. You might know her.
http://www.simonhuggins.com/uricon/classic/plath_sylvia/cut.htm
And some other stupid bitch who used the same format IN THAT POEM:
http://www.bartleby.com/113/4006.html
I am being sarcastic in my "fist shaking", because I have heard it all before. Hunter's Rapsody was a bad dream, I admit. But this one here that I started in this thread, I like, and I also like the format I use. And like I said, if I were in it for the money, I'd care.
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Good post.
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is actually worse than your stuff. I am amazed that dogshit like that ever gets published or receives any recognition of any kind. Just because Nicole Kidman was in some horrible movie about Sylvia doesn't mean that her "poetry" wasn't the crap that it was. Please don't tell me your favorite painter is Jackson Pollack. Those two, geez, they are a crime against paper and canvas.
LOL.......................WOW...............just............wow. If that Plath poem was worse than the one I posted here, I'll take that as a complement.
Again, most of the stuff I post is junk and therapy, I will admit. But to trash that particular Plath poem, you have got to have got to be smoking something.
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Potential Title: Truth devours.
Good stuff. And who cares if it's therapy or w/e. Keep writing poetry as if your screaming at the world.
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Sanity is not statistical ~Orwell~
Actually I did name it on another message board. "Peity". Yes, I am writing screaming at the world. But not out of hate, but more like telling my friends(humanity) to get their heads out of their asses.
"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers."Obama
Check out my poetry here on Rational Responders Like my poetry thread on Facebook under Brian James Rational Poet, @Brianrrs37 on Twitter and my blog at www.brianjamesrationalpoet.blog