Over all a good job has a rough draft,  very rough in parts. When he mentions Greengrich & Polkinghorne maybe you should have their photos appear. You should have pointed out to your friend, who called them better scientists then Dawkins;  how does he justify that statement when all three men are in a different feild of science.  Rev.Polkinghorne is a theoretical Physicist and Greengrich is an evangelical Astronomer.  Dawkins is a biologist.  Is he comparing their different sciences as being one better then another or he just favers the theists over the atheist?  If you get a chance ask him if he's read tracts from a religious Biologist, then compare Dawkins work to biblical biology.                                                      At 4:20 Schumacher is describing some theist "make it up has they go along....."   and is clearly ridiculing the idea of not seeing christianity has he does.  Later towards the end his voice and body language are makeing it up has he goes along, watch his final quote "...look at the whole evidence then try your DAMNDEST to see the way the world is."   He has the look of a man who suddenly realized his argument is a load of BS.   At the very least he contradicts himself.                                                                  btw   do you need someone for voice over narration? I work cheep.                   

I don't have any input for the topics or content. But if you want my honest opinion your narrative is a little nerdy.  It kinda sounds like you are just reading out of a book with no feeling. Slow down a little and try to sound like this stuff should matter to the listener (or viewer). Throw some of that music from the end in the start or keep it quietly in the background throughout the video. 

Just my opinion. I would probably sound the same way. I'm much better at writing that speaking.